This is my first actual story. The creation of this story started as a remedy for a fit of extreme boredom. Working second shift at AT&T, I had a lot of time on my hands, considering the fact that the majority of their customers called during standard business hours. So I’m browsing through Zoner’s site looking for recent fanfics to read during my slow time. Being a ravenous fan of Ranma, I try to get whatever new or updated fanfic that comes through the pipe. However, nothing new was found in the Ranma directory. So, being the Takaholic that I am, I traveled to the Urusei Yatsura directory, and stumbled across a new story titled “Urusei Yatsura: The Kidnapping (Lemon)” by George Mori. Anyway, being the hentai that I am I quickly glommed onto the story. After a record decode time with GZIP under Windows NT, I cracked the story open and read heartily. The rape scene aside, I thought it wasn’t a bad story (I recommend reading it for comparison purposes).

Anyway, after I was through reading it I started doing what I usually do to fanfics once I get them on my machine; I purge as many grammatical and spelling errors as I can find. In this case my tinkering went well beyond that. I had considered some of the sex scenes to be a little flat and downright uninteresting, so I started enhancing them. First I revamped (no pun intended) the scene between Mendou and Shinobu, then after that I was hooked on re-writing this thing.  I guess you can say that I went nuts.  ^^;  This story represents the end-result of the overhaul that I took George’s story through.

This should be thought of as a stereotypical pseudo-porn storyline complete with everything that one would expect from a late 80's porn movie (excepting for the crappy drum-machine "bow-chika-bow" in the background).  Besides that, you might (if you look close enough) find the occasional movie and/or anime series reference.  (Kudos to Dan Root for catching the Robotech scene...)  For all you Urusei Yatsura fans out there, I hope that you enjoy this story which I have titled:

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A wonderful writer of fanfiction parodies (known as Fanfic MST3K's) has cobbled together a hilarious critique of George's original story "The Kidnapping." I had to put it here after reading it and laughing my ass off. TPATL is mentioned a few times in there and I thank Megane 6.7 for doing that.